When asked what he thought was the greatest slogan he’d
ever seen, an advertising industry luminary is reputed to have
responded, “Farm-Fresh Eggs Sold Here.” Cutting through
the serenity of a backcountry road, the sign demands your
attention. If your favorite breakfasts come in sunny-side-up
and scrambled varieties, “farm-fresh eggs” provokes your
interest and fills you with desire. Meanwhile, the words
“sold here” command you to stop the car and take action.
To buy. In five short words, farm-fresh eggs sold here
captures the four-part formula for letters, flyers and
brochures that sell:
1. Attention
If you know what your customers want, it’s not hard to get
their attention. Just think about the biggest benefit your
product or service can provide and dramatize it. A gardener or
landscaper, for instance, can get attention by mailing a bag
of seeds. A fabric store can cut up scrap remnants and send
them to potential customers as samples. Set your imagination
free. Imagine a company that converts paper files to digital -
they could send file folders overflowing with papers. Words,
too, can be powerful attention-grabbers. There’s nothing
wrong with a big, bold headline that says something as simple
as “January Sale.” Or as provocative as “Save Your
Back.” Both sell snow blowers, but from different points of
view. Just be careful not to get too clever. A professional
writer may know how to begin with “Think small.” Your
beginning, however, will be much more successful if you get
right to the point: “How much time do you lose to computer
crashes every week?”
2. Interest
Now that you’ve got a customer’s attention, don’t
disappoint. Hold their interest with important, relevant
details about what you’re selling. If you’ve used the
“January Sale” or “Save Your Back” headline, show a
picture of the snow blower. Or at least write a very clear,
bold statement that you are talking about a snow blower.
Short, simple sentences keep a reader’s interest best. As
does believable, everyday language. Readers, for instance,
tend to tune out clichés like “We are committed to
providing the ultimate in quality and service.” Instead try
saying, “We have hundreds of satisfied customers. If
you’re not happy with our service, we’ll give you your
money back.” It proves quality and service.
3. Desire
This is where you really excite the customer for what you’re
selling. It’s giving your customer an opportunity to imagine
what it’s like to own and use your product. You can build
desire with a beautiful picture of a new ski jacket. You can
use a detailed description of how the microfibers adjust to
your body temperature, keeping you warm on the lift and cool
on the slopes. Or you could use both. The key to building
desire is to focus on benefits, not features. A feature tells
you what the product has, like a “hyper-fast Internet
connection.” Benefits, on the other hand, tell you how that
feature improves your life. A hyper-fast Internet connection
lets you “listen to music on the Internet without jarring
pauses, and lets you get more work done in less time.”
4. Action
Now that you’ve got people’s attention, interest and
desire, don’t forget to ask for the order. It’s not enough
to say, “Buy now.” Give a compelling reason to visit your
store or call your company immediately. For instance, “We
only have 25 of these amazing ski jackets in stock. First
come, first served” compels action. So does “This offer
expires November 23.” Professional mailers have noticed that
they get more responses when they put an expiration date on
the offer. You can even apply this urgency to a service
business: “If you would like us to prepare your tax return,
please call our office for an appointment before February
15.” Just be clear. And be direct.